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Wednesday, November 29, 2017

Box poem

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This week week in rimu we have been working on making our own poems. This is my Box poem. We had to add a lot of different sentences in our poem. I have included personification, Alliteration, Metaphor and similes.  Hope you enjoy.


I will put in my box
The raging loud voices of a ridiculous volcano,
The silent room of a sleeping baby,
And the sound of zachary zuppizich’s great voice.

I will put in my box
Impossible and amazing dream,
All of the premier league teams,
And the shiny sun's beams.

I will put in my box
The jewels from the deepest mines,
colours of the wildlife,
and the summers deepest seas.

I will put in my box
The sound of a giant waterfall, throwing water off the edge,
The sound of waves crashing onto a beach,
The awesome shines of the northern lights,

I will put in my box
The 13th month,
The 5th season,
The 8th day of the week.

I will put in my box
The screaming sound of the tree branches at night,
The hair of a hairy horse,
The heart of gold,
A rugby ball as bright as the sunshine.

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2 comments:

  1. Allan RobertsonNovember 30, 2017 at 11:17 AM

    This is a great poem with some wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing ideas from your imagination. There are certainly times when I would like an 'eighth day of the week.' What would you do with an eighth day of the week? Would you want a sixth day of school?

    I look forward to your next blog post.

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  2. AnonymousJanuary 9, 2018 at 3:36 PM

    Hey Shukoor,

    This is Jade C From the Summer Learning Journey 2018. I also be blogging with you this summer along with Hazel, Rachel, Jade F and many others. I can't wait to read more of your blog posts!
    :)

    This is truly a stunning poem. I am astonished by all the imagery words and your creative ideas! Your ideas of putting 13th month, 8th day, and 5th season in the box is absolutely amazing, I am going to share this poem with my peers and my tutees. I believe they will also love your poem like I do.

    We are thrilled that you've registered for the Summer Learning Journey with us. I know it can sometimes be tricky to get started. I have included a link to the week one activities, but remember, you can do them in any order! Check out the activities on our website, and then post your responses to the activities here on your blog site.

    https://sites.google.com/site/summerlearningjourney/weekly-activities/week-one

    I am looking forward to read more of your amazing activity posts!

    Jade C :)

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